IELTS Writing Task 2: Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree about this opinion?

Outline (Partly agree)

Opening:

- Paraphrase: protection of wild animals and birds -> mankind is responsible for earth's inhabitants

- However, we are giving more attention and resources than needed

Body:

One hand: Protection of wildlife is important

- loss of one animal -> affects the life of other animals

   -> less fish -> problems for bears

- no protection -> more cruelty and smuggling

   -> health benefit myths -> rising demand for rare animals -> more illegal acts

Other hand: there are other fields that need money

- poverty & hunger > animal extinction

  -> less advertising money -> more support for poor people

- spend more on education & health

  -> people benefit from improved schools and hospitals

Conclusion:

- Paraphrase opening

It is certainly mankind's responsibility to be good stewards of the earth and its inhabitants, especially those that are victims of habitat loss and mass hunting. However, I also think that we're dedicating more attention and resources than needed on this issue.

On the one hand, mankind must not begin to take lightly the protection of wildlife. The food chain dictates that all animals and birds are interdependent, thus the extinction of one will cause serious disturbances to others whose lives it helps sustain. For example, the diminishing number of fish in mountain streams has put tremendous strain regarding food supply on brown bears, which feed primarily on them. Another reason why wildlife conservation support must be perpetuated is that animal cruelty and smuggling would proliferate if this was not the case. Mythical health benefits of animal body parts has given rise to an increasing demand for some rare species such as rhinos or sharks, which in turn supports the aforementioned illegal acts against animals.

However, I do believe a number of other issues are in need of financial support and public attention as well. Poverty rates and world hunger are arguably more immediate threats to mankind than animal extinction. Excessive spending on rhino horn promotional campaigns would be better appropriated to provide food and clothing for people living in austerity. Furthermore, the two areas that should always be prioritized in a country are education and health. People are more likely to benefit directly from improved hospital and school capacity than they would from an additional shelter for endangered animals and birds.

To conclude, although it is irrefutable that the work on animal conservation must be continued, I would argue that there are other issues in more need of support and attention.

Written by IELTS Fighters (292 words)

Good vocabulary

- steward: people who take care of something

- take lightly: to treat something as if it's not a problem

- interdependent: depend on each other

- diminishing number: number that is reducing

- perpetuate: to continue something

- give rise to: lead to

- appropriate (v): to use something in an appropriate way

- prioritize: to make something a priority

- irrefutable: undeniable